Snow
The street jittered past like frames of a picture, dark green snapshots of hedges staining my vision before blurring into gray, potholed concrete or a dark black sky. My thoughts ground the world around me to a halt as the fiery cold tore my face inwards to a point around my nose, burning the edges of my body, ears, nose fingers. the snow glittered, suspended in flight. As I made my way up the hill took my first breath, A deep, deliberate inhale, the freezing flames tore through my throat, deep into my lungs, the cold a burning warmth within me. As I passed a lamp post the snow caught in the warm grasp of its light, jittering downwards. https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/u7wrgv/comment/i5hbnmv/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web2x&context=3
Posted Apr 20, 2022, 1:56 PM UTC
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