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astriya

The choice I made

Poem

" I'll never love you if you don't do what I say"

its the words I hear everyday

grew up with It being my bible

what i believed in till it all crumbled

a dog without an owner

stranded in a street

an alley away

from a life stuck on repeat

same words

same emotions

drowning in the sickness of it always being the same

ill never forget what i heard

"leave or stay and obey "

i disobeyed

its a choice i made

now its me and me

with the memories of feeling abandoned today

abandoned by a "home"

ill miss you

but ill never go back

that's what I tell myself to not turn back to your hate

-Astriya

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Posted Apr 25, 2022, 8:14 AM UTC

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Slimebot32•

Pretty good message. The pacing seems rather inconsistent though, it feels like sometimes there is symbolism just for symbolism’s sake that doesn’t really help the tone. The rhyme scheme is also a bit inconsistent.

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astriyaOP•

thank you for your comment

i will remember it for my next poem

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