[2448] Flesh Fly, revised.

Hello RDR...

So, I wrote this story almost a year ago during the absolute worst time of my life when I was on the verge of suicide. And I revised it when I was very sleep-deprived and had the flu. So... it should be an interesting read for those who choose to read it.

But be aware, that this story is dark. It was originally written as a standalone story. But then I kept expanding on it and it is now one chapter in a novel. So I had to go back and revise it because the more I developed the characters, the less this story made sense. There were a lot of continuity errors, etc. Plus I just tried to make it tighter and generally improve the mechanics.

To anyone who read my other story called Courage, this story takes place a year later. Same characters. Same Universe.

NSFW for violence and sexual content.

My work: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1CrjFR8IaDWdRo4gwMH7-2C7D9Dcnnkab69xK0qgm7Lw/edit?usp=sharing

In my opinion, all feedback is good feedback. Harsh critiques don't offend me. Feel free to really let me have it if you think it's necessary.

Cheers.

My most recent critique: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/uhzq2j/comment/i7ct2px/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=web2x&context=3 (It's a two part critique, the second part is a reply to this.)