No Time To Dwell
I don’t tell my name;
There are more important things to tell,
I could focus on each. letter.
But who has time to dwell?
K.C. Hoffman (me)
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Posted May 6, 2022, 11:34 PM UTC · edited
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I like the notion of not telling your name. I am curious what your motive is. I enjoyed it.
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I must admit. I would like to get more information.
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There’s something I really love about artfully short poems. You captured the essence of that style. I think you did it perfectly. I agree that names are absolutely not as important compared to many other aspects of oneself. I mean, how could something given to you by another person when you were yet to create any real personhood convey who you are better than, well, pretty much anything else about you?
Also, I can’t help but imagine a crafty, bearded man in the woods telling me this after I, a naive and young traveler, asked to know his name. That’s pretty nifty. Great job!
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Succinct and on point. Who has time to dwell? Let your work do the talking. Great piece. Reads as complete. if I were to suggest one change, I would say, replace the first tell with "utter" to avoid repeating the word. And its a slant rhyme with letter.