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tiyashology

The Diverging Heart

Poem

You are a paradox

You soothe my heart

Yet, I am gifted heartburn

You're like a symphony of symphonies

Yet, I am struck by a cacophony of screams

I've spent countless nights wishing for

...

A sweet reprieve

I've wished so viciously for peace-of-mind

Alas, you still shackle me

Or? Are you perhaps what sets me free

Truly. Truly, I wish to not care

Yet, I do. Truly. Truly.

...

Truly. I do.

Nothing compares in causing confusion in me

You, it all pales in comparison to you

Towering above me, my mild-mannered Goliath

You confuse me

You confound me

...

You astound me

And so, I circle around you, my Apathetic beauty

How? can you make me forget my own name

This flowing name, gifted by my mother

My name, that which means thirst

I am not me, the destiny of my name says

...

It tells me: " You are the Need,

the Glamour that entrances desert-travelers,

the Desperation between lovers who are to never meet again.

What shall you do now?"

But I turn my back to it, reject myself

All I wish for is to hold you, embrace you

...

Wake next to you, in hazy beams of Morning's rays

Not a word, yet we speak so loudly, the skies shake

I want to be the one to wipe your tears

I want to be the one to soothe you in Dreams

Why shouldn't we?

I'm right here. I'm right here. I'm right here.

...

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Posted May 14, 2022, 4:24 PM UTC

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Tony_813•

I just want to start off by saying that this is an absolutely beautiful poem. Kudos to you! I took this poem as the juxtaposition between love and hate. You contrasted “a symphony of symphonies” to a “cacophony of screams”, so I took this as a love-hate relationship. The part of the poem that struck me the most was “I want to be the one to wipe your tears, I want to be the one to soothe you in Dreams” because it shows that even though this relationship is causing you distress, the love that you have for this person is is profound beyond all measure.

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tiyashologyOP•

Thank you so much! You have no idea how gratifying it is to see someone understand my intent and stateofmind at the time of writing so perfectly. Any criticisms?

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