[2385] The Croquet Game

Hello!

The main character, Josef, has received an invitation to tutor the son of a rich general. He has accepted because he fancies the general's wife. In this chapter I hope to introduce some of the key characters in the story.

Link: [2,385] - The Croquet Game

Criticism: [2,450] - Hide and Seek

My biggest question is: how is the dialogue?

I want people to be brutally honest on this part, because I've been told that I'm bad at writing dialogue in the past, and I feel that it is often the worst part of the stories I write.

If you have any other thoughts or opinions, I'd love to hear them.

Thanks very much!