Yea I’m thinking of editing it to make those lines fit in better, they represent the sunniness of life and the dark storm of waves under them/ as you can see the italics all rhyme while the print don’t- a new thing I tried. You should definitely check out “A Peak into My Mind” on my profile I think you’d like it

That's good to know about rowing and sailing!  
With regards to the back and forth, I dis initially get that impression. I think lines 9 and 10 threw me off that though, because they're just long enough to take me away from that back and forth feeling. The shorter lines fit the back and forth a bit better for me, but that's just from my experience of crowds saying long lines getting muffled.

No you wouldn’t row a boat if the sails worked, in this specific scene the waves have crashed so much that the sails were damaged and now crew are rowing but instead of fearing the storm they are chanting to embrace life to its fullest- the print is the captain talking and the italics is the rest of the crew it’s kind of like a chant they do when they are in trouble

I've been trying to interpret the meaning for the italics. I thought initially it might have indicated a calling back and forth between captain and crew, but that doesn't quite seem to work with the lines.  

I *think* it's supposed to maybe convey the rowing of the boat, but I don't know enough about boating to know if you would be rowing if the sails are also hoisted. I could also see it conveying the waves moving in and out.

Love the last 4 lines "drink plenty of beer".
But honestly it's a really pretty and well written poem i love it :)

You should check out “A boy and ballon” poem I wrote I think you’d like it if you liked this, I only been writing poems for a few days now it’s been relaxing- helps me express myself better

From what I can tell this proverbial shop is a metaphor for our human existence with all the sailors being people, I assume the caption is a symbol of sorts for those who are older or those above us in general, either way I believe this to be very well executed

Thank you, it comes from recently reading shadow of the gods

I feel this could be lifted and put into vikinger Norseman style story sung on the way back from a raid


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Hoist the sails

*All you who fear*

Fear for death

*However, its life that’s near*

Pick up the pace

*Hold the line towards the rear*

As waves clash against our ship

*Our purpose is not yet clear*

Down from the heavens a gilded light speaks

*However, from below a dark screech is all we hear*

Row the ship onward

*Drink plenty of beer*

Life is too short

*To be living in fear*

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The Ship