[2294] The Parkourist's Tale - Sci-Fi

Okay r/destructivereaders

Story found here:

https://crestfall.substack.com/p/the-parkourists-tale?utm_source=%2Fprofile%2F4182278-crestfall-roastmaster&utm_medium=reader2&s=w

I have been taking notes, and absorbing feedback from the stories you all have reviewed thus far. I think you will like this new one. Grammar and spelling should be tight. Plot is well paced, and stays hot throughout the 2.3k words. There is a "flashback" near the beginning to set the stage, but hopefully my time changes are accurate.

This story is meant to grab you, and not let you go until the end. Hopefully it is as thrilling and mysterious to read as it was to write. Looking for feedback on technical aspects, as well as general readability/enjoyability.

No drawings yet for this one, but I'll get to that in the next few days.

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Do your worst people. Give it to me baby.

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I'm using these crits, since my last post didn't get any reviews:

Crit: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/v5tbp1/3607_a_torn_sky_chapter_2/ibo5duj/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=ios_app&utm_name=iossmf&context=3

Crti 2: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/v6gj55/2018_heartless_chapter_2_part_1_of_2/ibk8ka1/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=ios_app&utm_name=iossmf&context=3