[2212] Lars Mandrake, Quartermaster for hire

This is the first part of a fanfic for the Arcane Ascension series by Andrew Rowe focusing on minor character Lars Mandrake who runs a shop in the series.

I'm a new writer, but don't let that stop you from being critical. I decided to go with a fairly standard quest setup, "tropey" even, but I'm hoping it contributes to the piece's charm and shines the focus on the characters instead of putting off readers. My intention is to post this piece to A03 and r/CimbersCourt .

Any and all forms of critiques are welcome, but as this is the introduction, I'm particularly interested in how invested you would be to read about the upcoming quest, and your thoughts on Lars' characterization.

I believe most of the foreign terms from the books can be gleaned from context, but for those who prefer a glossary, here it is:

Visages - basically archangels

Attunement - a magical mark on people's bodies

Selys - their god

Spires - towers ruled by the visages and filled with challenge rooms.

Story: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1X9iflsLDl7f0VDb_NTIi5MFn-lVCXl9A9WhyC811ENw/edit?usp=sharing

Crit [3348]: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/ufze20/3348_beneath_the_kings_mountains/i7c2me6/?context=3