Reality itself being consciousness, the void too only exists in imagination, namely, our darkest fears of the unknown. So in reality, we are free to roam.

I really enjoyed this. I liked the exploration of science and philosophy in a poetic form. The touches on Descartes in Stanza 3 sort of landed the poem a touch of the Romantic style, which works well in contrast to the poem's subject.

Good stuff pal! Keep writing!

I've never seen something scientific actually have personality good job

Atoms and Void was the early world eyed by Democritus

Who could hardly imagine just Void that is now around us.

I like the use of repetition, spaced throughout and not overdone. I also think it can be tricky to take a subject normally so foreign and abstract and pin it down through poetry and you've done it well. Nice work.

I absolutely adore science incorporated into poetry.

The way you combine traditional rhyming snd verse with non traditional elements lands really well, and your choice of words is spot on.

I don't want to speak for your intended message, but my interpretation was that none are superior or inferior in this universe, that we are all just atoms, or as I like to call it, space dust.

Bravo, I really enjoyed this.


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