[2597] The Folly in Great Men--Prologue

Hi all!

This is the prologue to my fantasy novel. If any of you read my last prologue, you'll know this one to a bit...different.

Things to consider as you read and after you finish:

• Prologues are contentious. Does this work for you?
  • Does it establish too little about the world? Too much? Just enough?
• General comments on prose.
• Thoughts on characters?
• Pacing?

• !I've never written horror before. While I wouldn't describe this as horror, I would argue it pulls some inspiration from the genre. What are your thoughts on this? Was the suspense handled well? Did it build well, or was it too slow?!<

• !How did I handle the you-know-whats at the end? What about their introduction was handled well or poorly? !<

As always, comments are left on for your leisure. Thanks in advance!

Here's the Google link

Mods, here's the crit: A modest proposal [2891]