This is good, honest poetry. I wish it were a bit longer because I really like your writing style. Very relatable as well, keep writing friend!

Just a mood. When we're bumming around in our room we can think up all the dream situations of doing cool shit and hanging out with people but it feels impossible once you put yourself out there, how I feel at least and it's ass, a whole ass! Really nice to read just a bit short. A gold star and some sparklies ⭐✨✨✨

Solitude can be comforting. It gives you complete and utter control of your own world, but familiarity eventually breeds contempt.

This somehow hits me hard. Maybe sometimes, staying within these walls can be the most peacefull thing and which I too can say that. I really love this poem :3

Thank you, it was truly one of those days when I was in a bad mood. Those days come by every now and then. When they do I try to capitalize on it 😊

This made me think about how isolating yourself can make you feel good at first when dealing with mental health issues, but also how it can make it worse in the long run. This was touching man, and I hope you’re better.

This is a really nice poem that metaphor with the rabbit and the fox was great and so was the rhyme sight with light in my opinion this is a crazy good first poem ill be posting my first poem soon too :)

I like this one. Genuine and meaningful. I guess it could be longer but I think it’s fine as is and doesn’t NEED to be!

I like this word combination in the poem; freedom and rotting as well as future and no light. Showing opposites, showing positive side of solitude, freedom but also the dark side. I kinda like that is short, seems sharper. ☺️


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Thanks for all the feedback, it really means alot! 

It definitely could be longer. I might actually put some more work into later on. 😊

My first poem posted, also the first one I’ve shared with anyone. It’s about my struggles with mental health and social anxiety. As I said, this is my first poem here so any constructive criticism, advice or any other sort of feedback is welcomed :)


Inside my walls I feel free

Like a rabbit with no fox in sight

Here I can see my future, four walls and no light

Rotting here for the rest of my life, that's how it will be

Inside my walls I feel free 


Thank you for taking your time reading.
/Anton

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