Working on the 'voice' of my story. Thoughts? Still not sure if first or third person is the way to go.

Well the first thing I want to say is that I was pissed. The oversize bunny had shown up again at some point during the night. He was just about to show me the enemies’ secret hideout when all of a sudden Jewel, the dumb bitch that she is chose that moment to roll over and elbow me in the face.

Yeah, maybe I shouldn’a pushed her off the bed, being as it meant Scorpia, who lay on the other side of Jewel, would go tumbling out of bed as well, but I didn’t have a choice now did I?