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For something written in about 10 minutes, I think it shows remarkable promise. I'm not a Spanish speaker, so I can only look at the English translation, but it dishes out some stark, very bleak imagery that makes me uncomfortable (in a good way, like the poem intended). The first six or seven lines in particular are very strong, and bubbling with great ideas, although I think it kind of peters out a little and becomes a little too obvious towards the end. I would personally omit the last two lines since I'm not sure that the rest of the poem has a particularly religious reading, but I think that many people with far more poetic kudos than myself would disagree.

But, to answer your question, this is more than half decent and I enjoyed reading it more than a vast majority of poems on this subreddit. If this is what you can come up with in such a short space of time, I look forward to seeing you refine your abilities with the next draft.

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I improvised a very sincere and personal poem in some minutes