[2142] The Grey King Chapters 1 and 2

I was working on this manuscript for awhile now, longer than I'd care to admit for the short length. I was hoping I could receive a bit of feedback from you guys. It's a combination of low and high fantasy that follows members of a people that resemble ours for the most part, so the descriptions may seem a little more animeish than a traditional novel. Please be as brutally honest as possible. I'd rather know what's wrong than have to cut out all the sugar.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1W6QEr88OAIfP5Mhsf8KtZfISUu8x078aKG8aahHxOl8/edit?usp=sharing

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