[1450] Unmade, Alternative History/Superhero

(2700) https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/vwqokq/2747_solstice_chapter_one/ifwidgw?utm_medium=android_app&utm_source=share&context=3 - I'm on mobile so there's the ugly ass critique link (lemme know if it works I'm a bit worried it won't)

Really, I've been working on this for three years so you can imagine how incapable I am of being objective anymore. The story itself is a bit of an anthology with multiple concurrent arcs and I guess my biggest insecurity is how this comes off as a first chapter since I have two options and I might post the other one next depending on how y'all feel about this one. Anyway, happy reading, lmk anything that pops out.

Here it is: https://docs.google.com/document/d/120h86sd6W18fkllz2PXYHAQ88AG30810pV4pF0hcZAA/edit?usp=drivesdk