You know when you know

Poem

When you see someone and stop feeling blue

You know when you know

When somebody holds your hand and you feel brand new

You know when you know

When you can just sit and just share a moment of quiet

You know when you know

When someone can take away all your worry and care

You know when you know

When you find someone so stunning you cant help but stare

You know when you know

When you fall in love all over again Its simple yet so rare

Its definitely not a sin no matter how sweet it is

It may hit you like a truck and it may leave you awe struck but

When you fall in love you know when you know

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Posted Jul 16, 2022, 9:13 PM UTC

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mythrowawaysilly•

Personally i feel like you overused the phrases

You know when you know

Only to throw off the flow in the end making it feel sloppy. I see what you were going for but I feel like you should have committed the whole way. Without sounding mean though I don't think it's the best phrase to go with and I feel like the poem might be better off without the repetition of the phrase. Definitely not a bad poem and I hope I didn't ober step with this comment.

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