[2986] Forged for Violence: A Small Girl
I'm back, and I have returned with another chapter. This is a first POV for this character. Many of my in world definitions can be inferred by context, so it shouldn't be too jarring for new readers.
This chapter, we are introduced to Nhyri, a young Nialin woman. She's here to provide insight into the culture of Nialia, and some of its major conflicts. How does she connect to a western revenge story between two sisters after the Vexsanian-Nialin War? We shall see.
Main questions:
- Does the chemistry between the two roommates seem natural? Cringy? Does it ride that line well? I'm not a roommate myself, so I just wrote how two people would flirt.
I'vedefinitelybeen flirted to before. - Do the fantasy elements and phrases fit in naturally? Do they feel unnatural?
- How do you feel about Nhyri? She's intended to be one of the main POVs in my story. I intend for her to be a somewhat hotheaded, driven girl that will soon learn the cruel cababilities of humanity.
- There is some foreshadowing of more...magical elements. How was the implementation there?
Posted Jul 17, 2022, 10:44 PM UTC · edited
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