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Thanks for the feedback! Maybe I’ll show her the poem, and maybe she won’t think it’s weird that a dude she barely knows wrote a poem about her.

Love the part about her living inside your mind, now that she's gone. The rumination runs deep here. I hope the stoic girl starts paying rent somewhere.

the stoic girl 

with a playful smile 

could breath new life 

into mine

&amp;#x200B;

now that she’s gone

the stoic girl 

she lives rent free 

inside my mind

&amp;#x200B;

fluttering memories 

excite the butterflies 

the stoic girl 

left behind

&amp;#x200B;

always overthinking 

yet today is different 

only one thing on my mind: 

the stoic girl

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edit: format