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Appropriate_Donkey18

A party in the cave

Poem

A cave

The sounds echo

"Hello? Ow... Ow..."

"Is anyone there? There? there?"

Wasn't it a party in here yesterday?

The happy voices are gone this time

The lights are out

I look around

The roof seems endless in the dark

I like it like that sometimes, makes me reach for nothing in peace

But only without guilt, when my flashlight stops working

But by luck, that's not today

I run. With some help from a dying flashlight, I see glaring eyes staring back at me

"Fuck!"

My erratic steps have made too much noise

Hundreds of sounds are now screaming back

In waves they strike

It's a matter of minutes but feels like a lifetime

How can something endless be so many things?

I dropped my flashlight, it's broken again

The sounds have stopped, the roof paints black

I smile.

I feel alive, no flashlight is needed

In laughter I hear the first song of the party again

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/w0iz5f/lets_suck/

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/w0jq5n/ones_greatest_enemy/

Posted Jul 22, 2022, 7:04 PM UTC

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Ok-Signature-8035•

I love the eery description followed by feelings of comfort- thats my favorite thing in writing- then followed by fear it hooks me in. I feel like this poem can be interpreted in so many ways, and my mind is connecting it to personal experiences

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Appropriate_Donkey18OP•

Thank you so much for your reply! 😄

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