[1795] Crystals of Ink and Bleach - Chapter 1

[1795] Crystals of Ink and Bleach - Chapter 1: FOOL I

Hi guys. So I just got into writing recently. The last time I actually wrote a story was back in highscool for my English language exam, lol. So I'm brand new at this.

Any and all feedback is welcome, harsh or kind.

A quick overview of this story; I'm quite ambitious so it's going to have six different perspectives. The first chapter perspecitve is about a man who wants to make life easier for his race by attending attending a prestigious academy that acts like a university in order to achieve his goal of making it into the upper echelon of society so that he has the power to change things.

Let me know if you find it interesting or boring.

I mainly would like feedback on my prose. How descriptive it is, if it needs more or less. How engaging is it for a first chapter. etc etc.

Here's the link to my story.

Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1PnbCBD_WpFZlQURRbCu-4d121qhPJnAfMMp4LB3Ei4c/edit?usp=sharing

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Enjoy.