A wonderful angel-haiku
A flower of hope
You say we shall meet again
Right back to heaven
Posted Jul 28, 2022, 12:10 AM UTC
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A romance haiku! I like imagery.
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Thanks for commenting! It's really interesting that you interpreted this as a romance haiku. I was more going for a loss of a loved one, how did you interpret this as a romance?
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I thought of "heaven" as the time you spent together and the "flower of hope" at the possibility of seeing each other again.
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I see,that's really interesting, thanks for replying and reading!
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I also first thought that it was a romantic haiku. I did realise on closer inspection that it more fit the theme of the death of someone beloved though...
Either way it's lovely! Short and sweet.
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Thank you very much for checking it out! It's always interesting to see how people will interpret a poem differently.
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I love this simple angelic Haiku. You can tell the meaning of someone who has passed away and then the person still alive is saying that they will meet the loved one again when they too shall pass. I've always loved expressions that use light symbolism like this this because it never fails to give me a fuzzy feeling.
What is your favorite flower of hope?
Mine has always been lavender. :)
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Thank you for the amazing compliments! Lavender is a wonderful flower, mine have always been dandelions. :)
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What a beautifully striking written-image.
The romance in the beginning is perfectly balanced by the slight kick in the emotions at the end. Lovely haiku OP
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Thanks for commenting and reading, I really appreciate it!
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I get the feeling that this is supposed to be someone’s last moments, yet somehow you managed to make it more sweet than bitter. “Right back to heaven” suggests that this person was an angel on earth, like their death was more of a return home than a transition.
You so perfectly captured the feeling of hope, faith even. Well done!
That was exactly what I was going for! You understood the message I was trying to portray really well. I had my grandma in my mind when I wrote this, so you're spot on.
This is such a heartwarming way to remember her. Thank you for sharing. 💕