😊 thanks. I was going for a more objective view and rhetorical feel. But I guess my bias slipped through 😅

So smoothly you portrayed the naive mind of us, humans. How we tend to proactively depend on artificial happiness while jeopardizing our natural occurance. I really loved the approach and also the rhyme scheme, pretty great.

Well said
 just a crack at the idea of what is natural not a flex to the responsibility of man in taking care of it 

Rhetorical poetry is fun gets people talking

"Nature, Mr. Allnut, is what we are put on this earth to rise above." From The African Queen.  The naturalistic fallacy. Just because something is natural, that doesn't make it good. Murder is natural.


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What is natural?

Is it breath in the lungs?

Is it what's ingested, defecated?

It's it the nest, it's precious tenants?


And if it's all the above,

Why so do we ignore out role.

We call our sky scrappers and technologies

Unnatural fallacies, but honestly


We nest in clay, turned from concrete paste, to beams

We mold dams, and quick well,

We're compelled to step on road ways and landscapes

Home made with grass bred to our taste

And I get the harm


I get the wrong in the industry, and over use of simplicity

 But isn't this all natural, the human, the drive of civilization

Isn't this all a product of a naturally selected mind frame

Why do we view our synthetic world, as unnatural? 




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Natural