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Volixit

Obligatory Self-Obliteration

Poem

Sunlight shimmers through leaves of jade. Dew encompasses every blade. Through Winter's shrill and Summer's moan one might wonder just how they've grown.

I often ponder why we trade such leaves of green for gold and stone. The forest speaks and man pervades searching for a deceitful throne.

They may find it some awful day when the sky's black and the world's gray. "Innovations", they seem so bleak. In the end, we'll see what we seek.

Riches unbeknownst to mankind. Now it's air that we cannot find. Through rubbled plains and cities ash man will miss how they all once laughed.

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Posted Jul 31, 2022, 8:56 AM UTC

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Particular-Cod2121•

The first thing I noticed within this poem was it's sense of finality towards its themes of environmentalism (the main subject of the poem in my interpretation). This sense of finality is really beautifully illustrated through the use of a speaker who feels detached, even, omnipotent in how they address both the natural world and those who seek to destroy it.

Another aspect that really contributed to this was the short form of the poem with its tableaux-esque stanzas. The poem feels out of time and neither in the present, nor past, nor future. It treats all of these passages of time in a very ambiguous way which again contributes to how intriguing I found the poetic voice that narrates this poem.

I really enjoyed this one and the use of language to form imagery was really powerful, looking forward to reading more poems like this.

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VolixitOP•

Thank you friend, your kind words mean a lot to me. :)

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SwagMage•

Completely reflective of what is going on with the world today. With climate change, industrialization, overharvesting of materials, I can only wonder what Earth is going to be in the next hundred years.

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VolixitOP•

It's a sad world, built on a foundation of things that makes it sadder.

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