yheah im fine im just tired

I love the title. Makes me think when someone ask you if you are ok. But in reality you feel empty and hate yourself. I would just say that the format could be better, but the peom is great.

I truly admire the styles of those poets who use condensed imagery to express worlds. I don't know if in your case this was a conscious effort or just your natural style, but I reckon it's very hard to pull off well. However, I must say that some lines just didn't click for me. Maybe I'm being stupid, but "houses without dogs feel empty" doesn't mean much to me. "Bandaids on my feet", on the contrary, is a clever way to express the feeling of walking on eggshells, as I believe another commenter interpreted it. I think though, if you were going for a very condensed poem, you could have made more use of vivid imagery, even if with simple words. For example, the first line of the poem describes a situation, but it doesn't do it by way of imagery. I think if one were to use an image which would point in that direction, rather than saying it straight away, it would suit the abstract tone of the rest of the poem better. The same goes for the title.

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I really related to this story. I feel to me it brought emotions of my own experiences. My thoughts and emotions being expressed hurting my partner. I also like the illustration of you walking on eggshells. I interpreted this as not being able to be honest with hurting them.