My tears are sacred and my dermis burns
the holywater away from my cheeks,
leaving a salty pillar of a human being,
standing amidst a sulfurous serenade
of the sunlights dripping saliva.
I will stand awake and alive, as passersby
take my arms and my eyelashes as a garnish
for their french fries.
Posted Aug 8, 2022, 11:05 PM UTC · edited
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Wow. I'm in love with the story being told here. To me it's about someone who's been through so much. Someone who finds themselves pure. And in the situations they face, they continue to sacrifice themselves for the sake of others having their treats. A truly selfless individual, but somehow, one that also knows their own worth. I've got a thing or two to learn from this. Thank you for sharing.
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