[478] Psychopomp

Hello everyone, I've another bit of flash fiction I'd appreciate some criticism on. My piece earlier this week was also about ghosts, so I suppose I've had ghosts on the brain (or in the lungs perhaps?). I've been working on flash fiction to try and get better at telling stories without any additional fluff, which I think previous stories have suffered from a bit. All feedback is appreciated!

The name is a a work in progress. It's thematically appropriate, but reads weird if you don't know what it is. I definitely didn't until I looked it up. Any alternate suggestions will be taken on board.

Psychopomp

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