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I really like the first half. It flows smoothly. I feel like the second half is a jumbled mess. But it's likely I'm missing the point. Good job :)

It gets a bit choppy towards the end, especially with wording (i.e. "ended on knee"). I'm not sure why, but "decree" also feels almost like a hamfisted rhyme, but I like the flow of it overall!

A man that I knew  
When my thoughts were still few  
Gave me a lesson  
That I sent for review  
The premise was clear  
And the logic was sheer  
But for some reason still  
It felt like veneer  
So I ran and I crept    
I ducked and I dipped  
Till the flame boiled trees  
Went upside and then split  
So I ended on knee  
But I felt a decree  
It slapped me in purple  
And I returned with a _________  



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