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Afoolfortheeons

The Holy Sun

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Madness is the brightest light in the sky;

Lucidity is the solid stone on which I stand.

While the former begs me to try and fly,

I know that my booted feet belong on land.

But that doesn't mean I don't use the stars,

In all their brilliant glory dancing overhead,

To guide me to lands across oceans afar.

I just mean to say that I will sail instead.

And with both sides of me alive and well,

I depart for the most distant of horizons.

So for you who wants to travel, I must tell

That the best star to follow is the holy sun.

Critique One

Critique Two 

Posted Aug 19, 2022, 12:19 PM UTC

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Meegakarla•

Oh wow this is a real thinker! My reading comprehension isn’t amazing and I can’t fully decode what it’s about but either way the rhymes and words choices are great and it really does paint a picture even if I have no idea what it’s about (and that’s not a problem with the poem, like said I’m not very good at decoding stuff)! It reads like an old novel in a way I can’t fully describe other than just the words chosen. Absolutely delightful

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AfoolfortheeonsOP•

No problem, as a schizoaffective and autistic person, I have trouble decoding some people's poems too, so I'd gladly interpret it for you. So, there's these two forces within me; madness and lucidity. Madness I associate with light in the sky, lucidity being the ground on which I stand. I say I'm tempted to lose myself in madness, but I've reached a point where I know I have to stay rooted in reality. That's when I effectively say the light in the sky still helps me when navigating the oceans, so in staying half in madness and half in lucidity, I gain the ability to travel farther than either of them by themselves. I then leave off on the note that the greatest light to let lead you is the holy sun, which I personally interpret to mean God. So, in essence, I'm saying you need to stay in the realm of rationality, but with faith in the divine, you can accomplish the most within your life as it will move you better than pure logic or pure madness possibly could by themselves. That's my intention at least. I hope that cleared up any confusion for you, and I'm very glad you enjoyed it! Cheers!

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Meegakarla•

Oh my goodness that actually makes a lot of sense in hindsight! (Oh and I’m autistic too :3)

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