Glass half empty or half full

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This is honestly beautiful to me. The imagery created by your words is masterful, I don't know you and yet I feel I do; isn't that the goal of any poetry? Thankyou for sharing, I feel we may relate in some ways.

I’m a glass half empty

under the half moon.

This line really caught my attention.

Since you have proposed for a honest review, I would like to give it a go, though I'm no one's master.

1. Refrain from using "thee" and "thy". It makes the web of your poetry breakable. I mean avoid clichè. It would flow smoothly if you just use "you" and "your".

2. I was told that complexity of a poem should come from its lines not from synonymical words. If you like, you can also follow/keep this card with you. Your wish.

3. I'm no one's master. So, don't take my words literally, hehehe. I'm just giving you a constructive feedback.

Keep it coming and 'May you mellow with time'.

I really like the optimism that is displayed in this poem. It's like the "faint but twinkling star" represents someone older, wiser, who has seen this before, and is telling the narrator that the future, one's perspective, is up to them and them only. That's a really refreshing way to think about things. For me personally, I've been focusing way too much on the negative in life, so this poem has actually made me pause and think about the role that I play in my situation/future.