[978] Ronno

Hi All,

First time posting here, so I hope my critique below is adequate.

This is the opening chapter of my 80k Sci-Fi novel, Ronno. I'm working on getting it query ready after the most recent round of feedback and edits. I've recently cut a bunch of world-building from the opening chapters, so I want to know if it still flows, if the character goals are clear, and most importantly if you'd keep reading. I've also revamped the Chunk/Aniu interaction to better intertwine it with the overarching conflict, so I'd love to know if it reads in line with the voice of the rest of the passage. I always love suggestions for what you'd want added, so those would be appreciated, too. Thank you!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1EqCOP37HF0WdXxTjnVwtFs1aBUX5o9XaaOKSauQ_7wU/edit?usp=sharing

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