Aw I’m glad you liked it! Friends are pretty great :D

This post made me love my friends even more

I thought that the topic of this poem was really an interesting that made me think about my own behavior towards friends, and my own feelings about those three little words. I enjoyed the exploration of a relationship, and I enjoyed that the discussion was about a group of people rather than a relationship with one particular person, this gave it intimacy I thought while at the same time making it accessible.


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Thank you! It’s honestly a result of thinking about how I’ve met other friend groups who were more verbally appreciative of each other but even though mine doesn’t exactly say “I love you” all that often, they show that they do through their actions which are more meaningful to me

an optimistic poem,  
with a clear rhyme scheme and positive message.  
But you never answered why they don't say it  


they probably should

Really nice poem. Demonstrating your love is so much more important than declaring it - and I think you've done a good job of capturing that.

You asked for constructive feedback so a note on the ending. Extending the last lines out will give it more of a punch (ie don't abandon the rhythm - particularly shortening it as you have, unless the abruptness is intended to serve some other meaning). Reading your work out load can really help with noticing this. Something like

.... Got a clue

The extent to which just how much

I love those bastards too.

I love how the repetition and added information keeps increasing the weight of the sentence each time you say "My friends don't say I love you".  It starts off feeling a little weird but each time you say it you understand more and more that they don't say I love you, they live I love you.  

A good way to enhance this even further would be to break the structure of the poem up a little each time that pivotal line is repeated.  A period when the other lines don't have one would add force, and something like adding more space around the line instead of keeping the single line structure would cause a mental pause that makes the reader linger just a little longer on that key phrase.  

I like it, nicely done

The opening line really grabbed me, made me want to keep reading as it poses a good premise--something that I think is hard to do, but you've nailed it. Overall, the poem is sweet, reminded me of my own friends, made me smile the whole time. Gonna call them now :)

Really sweet! Great rhythm to this poem, and brings back nice feelings from school!

Man, this made me miss my friends so much! such a wholesome and sweet poem. I'm going to go text my friends real quick.

My friends don’t say I love you

We go on road trips and drives

Send each other music and

Indulge in each other’s lives




My friends don’t say I love you

We notice cracks in a smile

Ask “are you okay” and

Check up once in a while




My friends don’t say I love you

They’re there when I need them most

Doesn’t matter if I’ve asked

If they’re far or if they’re close




I know my friends love me

But they haven’t got a clue
 
Just how much

I love them too




This is my first poem here, so constructive criticism would be greatly appreciated!

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