This is great. I have been there before and get where this is coming from. The only thing is I would omit the sentence "why cant I find a way to get it outside". The poem has a... choppy edge to it and that may take away from the flow. 
Keep on writing!


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I love the way that you described frustration by trying to find a way to cope with it that makes you even more frustrated in the first place therefore just bottling it up because there’s no other choice to pick from. Overall it was a great poem! Keep up the good work!

I think that feeling frustrated with having something larger than life inside oneself and not feeling like you have the tools or ability to express or release it is something that most artists can relate to.  It is one of the main things that has driven me to try and hone my writing.
- I appreciated the short nature of the lines, and i’ve given myself pause between each one and allowed them to breathe.  it added a lot of unsaid things between the words that I think would have become derivative if they had been said directly.  it is also a very nice form for the story telling overall.
- someone else pointed out the line “why can’t I find a way to get it outside” and i’ll parrot here, it does stand out and feels a bit disconnected.  it stops the flow and, while I think it could be done intentionally to emphasize that line, it feels clunky overall.  I think that rewriting the flow or omitting could help tighten things up a lot.  
- I think i’m left wanting more overall, just because I kno

Great poem about helplessness. Great pacing as well!

 

I sit at my desk

So many feelings spin around my mind

I grab a guitar

I realize I don’t know how it play it

I grab a pen

I realize I have no paper

I am filled with rage

I thrust out of my chair

Feelings rush into my body

They manifest in air

I prepare to yell

The air goes from my lungs to my throat

I open my mouth and close my eyes

I prepare for the noise

Nothing

No words

Silence fills the room

I collapse in my chair

I feel so much

Why can’t I find a way to get it outside

I leave it locked up

Not by choice

I just can’t find the key

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