[1575] A Pinch of Blue, Chapter 1

Hello everybody,

This is the first chapter my most recent WIP. I came in here maybe two years ago on another account and was quickly scared away. After that I wrote an epic fantasy novel [130k] and tried to edit it to no avail. I've since trunked it. Taking a few things I've learned, and hopefully forgetting a few bad habits sprawling epic fantasy tends to teach, I'm back.

Some things I'd like feedback on:

• I feel like I'm going too fast? Like I could be filling in all these potholes in the narration, but at the same time when I go back to put my fingers on the keyboard I really don't want to fill in those potholes. They look nice.

• Tips on getting into my character more, perhaps specific spots where you would. Or wouldn't? I swear I'm using his name too much.

• Yes, I know everyone hates brackets. If I really can't convince anyone how fun they are, they'll all be cut in the final draft.

LINK A Pinch of Blue, Chapter 1

Critiques:

2609 Epic Fantasy 2nd POV

3937 The Trash Heap