Don't Tell Me The Odds

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Seven seas such a wide expanse

A few degrees a delicate dance

Fish boil without being eaten

Frogs boil without even feeling

Anthropocene Anons Unforeseen

Antiquiated Capital Cannot Be Clean.

Their Bombs Blow Kids To Bits

While Utrarich Enslave Those Kids

Their Guns Badges Clubs And Mace Kits

We've Got Our Guns Knives Or Only Fists

Day To Day We Struggle To Exist

But Today's The Day That Love Persists

As Love Has Been A Revolutionary Impulse

As Death Shall Come That Evolutionary Insult

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Posted Sep 10, 2022, 1:36 AM UTC

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I like we are going with this I’m totally feeling the vibe. I’ve been working on something that’s along the same vein for the last few days. I consider stumbling across this a bit fortuitous. My advice is to take a step back totally put it on your mind pick it back up tomorrow Fresh and resume this eloquent flow. Cheers!

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Thanks! I'm wondering if this is a certain type of poem or unclassifiable. Do you know?

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I’m not sure about that kind of stuff I have no knowledge of poetry structure. Aside from a haiku and even that I would have to look up to make sure what syllables go where. My view on poetry is that it’s art so it doesn’t need to fit into a category you can just create your own category. I’m sure you could ask Reddit and they would know

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