Lot of raw emotions in this piece. We all go through some pretty dark phases in life, man. I have heard the phrase "Chin up, soldier!" so much I almost thought of it first when I read this. But yea, things never are that simple. I could use a cigarette right about now as well, maybe I'll light one with you. Very well written and beautifully touching.


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How do I stop the shiver.

The feeling of nothingness.

The pain of being alone.

Every step I take sinks me deeper.

I cant breathe.

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Every time I catch it I lose it.

I keep rolling with the punches.

But the hits add up and the damage is permanent.

How many more falls must I survive.

Does anyone see me.

Do I even wanna see me anymore.

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I scare myself.

I left my heart on my shoulder.

Everyone took a swing.

I asked for this didn't I?

Cant sleep or eat.

So sore from moving forward.

Light another cigarette and shut up.

..........................

Is that better............

I'm okay...................

Right.....................

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very new just trying to get some feelings out and would love feedback thank you.