This is pretty simple but powerful. I think what really sells it is your abrupt language and the very separated lines. Well done!

You were heard loud and clear! Keep writing and keep posting. The format of answering questions with single word responses reminds me of a public protest rally. Works well in your personal protest too. Thanks for sharing.

The abrupt use of language is masterful in conveying the mood of this piece. I feel my own feelings and emotions emerge as I read your words, thank you for sharing this. Well conveyed and evocative. What you have to say is (unfortunately) very relatable right now.

Relevant. I can see this being read aloud at a slam poetry reading with lots of heart and feeling, as conveyed.


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 who am I

but my modest heels

who am I but my

stained teeth

red 

pink

nude

what am i but

quiet 

meek

shy

what am i but a

bitch

queer

whore

am i just

dust

dirt

noise

will you ever let me be

heard

alive

human

this is not 

right

know your place

right

you know you like it

ri-

this is all you are

you are female

and you will pay for it

with your

body

life

livlihood

because i am man

no law can hold me

because i make them

no law can stop me

because i am tempted

no law can keep you safe

because i am above them

and you are

mine

mine

mine

&amp;#x200B;

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I'm No One but a Wo(Man)