I’m glad the biblical imagery was caught! Thank you for the kind words :)

I’ve never read a tanka before. Thank you for that introduction. I like how each line draws the subject more and more into a living state. It echoes back to Lazarus’s resurrection; how he was awoken from the cave and released by Christ. 

I enjoy the choppy consonants. Lovely read all around!

Eerie noir. Could be more developed. Keep writing. Enjoyed it.

Yes! A haiku with An extra 7 syllable couplet at the end. Rather rare to see in English but there are some of us out there who like to try and evoke feeling with imagery and restricted phrasing: just a bit less than haiku writers 😛

Today I learned that a tanka was a thing. Thanks for introducing me to the form :)

It’s basically a haiku with extra bits?

I like how this could be either a Bible story, a love story, or something sinister and horrific, depending on how you choose to read it.

Reminded me of old lore and fables. Loved.


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languishing in dark     
sole spectre of blood and flesh      
man of living death     
her touch grants him life anew     
beckon Lazarus, come forth.     

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lazarus (tanka)