[1476] Rapture- Intro Scenes

Hey guys, this is an excerpt of the first chapter of something I’m writing.It's still very much a rough draft but I just wanted criticism on a couple of things.

1. How is the intro so far? Is it intresting enough to keep you reading? Is it confusing? Or is it just straight up boring?

2.It’s not much but I wanted to know if you guys liked the introduction of the 3 characters. Specifically Gauis and the Mom.

3. Is the dialogue at least serviceable.

4. How’s the atmosphere so far?

Of course any other comments and criticisms are fair game. Thank you for your time. And don’t be afraid to absolutely destroy it if it’s garbage.

Story Link- https://docs.google.com/document/d/13TQ61LIIMCmIEFOK5Wbu8WI6r3ApFuSxmMHy8YACW7E/edit

Crit-https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/xgjow8/1601_ken/iovkuel/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=ios_app&utm_name=iossmf&context=3 https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/xgjow8/1601_ken/iovkskq/?utm_source=share&utm_medium=ios_app&utm_name=iossmf&context=3