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Poisoned Paralysis

Poem

I bit off of your poisoned apple

It stained my lips black and spread amongst my lungs

As my teeth started to rot from the tainted sugar

I could no longer smile for you

So you bathed in my angst

Then rinsed yourself clean of my attachment

I bargained for your acceptance

Which proved fruitless as you made me negotiate for your love

But talk is cheap and there was never enough to pay the dues you felt entitled

So I let the pain seep into my soul

And I didn’t move an inch from the hole you had dug for me

My trust was put into the grave with my name on the tombstone

Your eyes, the same stoic blue they’d always been

Became the oceans I’d travelled

They became the waters of hell

So I set sail in search of your approval at the cost of jagged flesh and broken patience

Because there had to be a way to end this pain

Yet you’re the North Star that guides me through this darkness

So I drift circles around the island we’d once shared as home

And I call that moving on

I call that enough

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Posted Sep 22, 2022, 1:58 AM UTC

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wishfulpeacherino•

Thanks for sharing your poem! One thing that stood out to me was the way you use metaphors throughout the poem. One great example of this was how your trust and your current situation was in a hole/grave.

And I didn’t move an inch from the hole you had dug for me

My trust was put into the grave with my name on the tombstone

Your title is also very appropriate for this poem where in the end, the speaker is still stuck in the island, all thanks to the "Poisoned Paralysis" induced by the relationship.

I look forward to read any other poems you may write in the future!

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ark_aid_OP•

Thank you, I’m glad you understood the deeper metaphors! I try to weave them together into one larger central theme in all of my poetry and prose. There’s plenty more to come

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