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ark_aid_

False Idol

Poem

I still idolize you

While I sit, the broken demon

Thinking of all the ways to return to the soil I was made of

Hell must be a library

Filled with all the poems I’ve written, wishing you would have stayed

They echo the halls of this empty heart

And torment me with their ringing

Shallow, watered down epithets stain their pages

Their spines broken

From how many times they’ve been bent under my wishful thinking

You’re the devil

The way your name dances in their titles

And my love

I’d swallow your bastards blood

Taint my innocence with your guilt

If I’d finally be enough

If I’d finally be someone you could love

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Posted Sep 22, 2022, 6:54 AM UTC

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cruelchampagne•

The emotions in this piece are really raw, I can really feel them through your words. I love the religious imagery/comparisons, "Thinking of all the ways to return to the soil I was made of" particularly hits hard, especially when followed by all of the lines about hell.

This piece is really great :) Wonderful job!!

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ark_aid_OP•

Thank you so much, I appreciate the compliment

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