[2998] Forged for Violence: The End
I return with yet another chapter: The End. Some of you may have seen posts of other chapters from the same story, but this should be somewhat easy to get into as a new reader. This chapter happens after a prologue with Aneff from a reader's perspective.
This is Arrenim's first POV chapter, and he is set to be one of the main characters along with Aneff. This is the "Call to Adventure" point in the journey, and I want to know if it's enticing enough for a reader to want more.
Some questions:
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How well did I portray Aneff and Arrenim's relationship? Their connection is a central part of the story, and I want to show their trust in each other in the first chapter after the timeskip.
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Dialogue. Was it good? Bad? Natural? Wooden? It's 90% of the chapter, so please be honest.
Critiques:
Posted Sep 22, 2022, 2:19 PM UTC