Very interesting I personally very much love poems that are made up of a myriad of short lines that indirect connect to tell a narrative that might not be completely obvious if you were to read them completely at face value if that makes any sense. Repetition is the name of the game and you are doing that well. That being said I did feel like I kind of got bored part of the way through which shouldn't be happening if you do repetition perfectly so while you're doing it well I feel like there is some improvement that could be made I am not sure how to do it myself so I can't necessarily give you the answer as to how but I can give you my feedback here

This poem has a great flow to it in the beginning, it's easy to follow and fun to read. The end is a bit out of tune with the rest of the poem though, particularly the line 'is making you feel', it just seems like an abrupt change to the rhythm of the poem at that point. It's not anything major, still a cool poem with an awesome message :)

What a really good poem, I liked how you are saying that people can be like others but are also like themselves and unique

Ah, our expectations and how we can sometimes force people to be something or someone they aren’t. Your poem reads like a Doctor Seuss poem with its simplicity, and yet at the same time it reads like a warm friend in high school encouraging their socially anxious peer. Cheerio!

Whimsical and fun. Name makes me think of that Silverstein song Boy Named Sue. I like that despite its simplicity, there is undeniable truth to it — and a self-lesson to boot!

I agree that your poems gives off Dr. Seuss vibe - in the best way possible. I think you did an amazing job with your rhyme and ending with “feel-real” as opposed to another “you-Sue” type of rhyme. It really made the ending stand out. Great work!

Your poem reminds me of a dr. suess poem. I feel this could teach children how important it is to be themselves. I like the tempo and rhythm of the poem is read. Great job

I enjoyed this, i think a lot of people try to imitate others identities to try to better fit in. just be yourself. love the simplistic style and use of repitition good job :)

I love this so much. There isn’t much to say in terms of advice or feedback, as the meaning is quite overt. Excellent job! :)

I don't know what to say. I feel like I'm Sue, but I shouldn't. I don't feel like Sue when I should. This poem is beautiful and straight to the point. It's easy to understand and isn't crowded with huge, unnecessarily long, and complicated words. I like the style of short and easy-to-understand lines. It's like a lightswitch that works properly, not flickering, and up is on. It's simple, and gets to the point, just the way it should. Kudos.


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