[1563] Two Poems

Hello.

Here are two poems I've written. If I had to give them a genre label, I guess I would call them horror poems--but I kind of resent that idea. One is quite short and the other is quite long.

I'm curious to hear overall impressions, but of course line edits, nitty gritty details, and whatever else you want to throw my way is always very much appreciated.

If you think that the rhythm falters considerably at certain points, please point those parts out to me. Similarly, if you think I sacrifice clarity or purpose for the sake of a rhyme I would like to know that too.

TW: Violence, Mentions of Child Abuse

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