I’m glad you enjoyed my poem. Thank you so much for reading with such thoughtful eyes and heart. I’m really grateful for your kind words. Your zeal is encouraging to me. ❤️

My goodness this is beautiful anguish. 

"What am I going to do with a hairdryer?" - I honestly imagined you crying writing this last line. It's a strong and tangible admittance to the finality of the situation. I'd cry if it were me. 

Your ability to fast forward slow processes is well received! And the length of the piece suits the subject matter perfectly. 

Well done x

You’re reaction and keen analysis are very much appreciated. My sparse style is meant to evoke those questions. It makes the poem less mine and more the readers’. The questioning feeling you describe it what I personally enjoy when reading a poem.

When I first read this poem, I didn’t know what to think so I decided not to comment. 

But then my mind kept coming back to this. I have so many questions that are rightly left unanswered. The way slow time moved fast — I think many of us have been there. In grief and in confusion and in many other times. 

But where has she gone? I think we might assume death or divorce, but it could be many other things. A child who has moved away (also mirroring the way time moved too quickly). But it could also be a rumination on something like memory loss or dementia. “I’d swear she just left” evokes a certain confusion. 

Overall, as I said, I have far more questions than insights. But a sign of evocative art is the inability of the reader to forget it, which is what I’m experiencing.

You're welcome. Everyone should get some feedback.

I feel the disorientation you are expressing in this about you can get sucked into the details but also not fully recognize what it is.

I’m really happy you enjoyed my poem! It means so much to me. Thank you so much for interpreting my poem with an open heart. Thanks.

I thinm your use of the passing of time soooo slowly, sluggishly (or snailishly) moving along in slow motion, is so incredibly powerful. The shock we have to things we experience definitely brings our world to a crawl, which the leads to confusion later mentioned in the poem. Its whiplash to suddenly come to from living in slow-motion. This is a wonderfully relatable and beautifully written!

Thank you for the feedback and compliments. You’re too kind. Glad you read my poem. Thanks again.

This poem is really cool. The way time flies, while this person does seemingly nothing other than sit, watch, and think about her. The poem flows great, and I loved reading it. Overall, it was very relatable and well written.

Thank you for the compliments. I’m so happy you enjoyed my poem. Thank you so much!

Oh that slow, quiet, empty feeling. So heart breaking but so beautifully written. And the last line… “What am I going to do with a hairdryer?” Love it.

You are a sweetheart ❤️. Thanks for the encouragement!!!

Oooh, amazing. No thank *youu* for sharing your words with us.

Thank you for the encouraging words. I appreciate the notes as well. I’m grateful that you read my poem so thoughtfully. Good point about the grass line. Molasses twice felt better to me for rhythm and emphasis. Time is intentionally skewed to illustrate the disorientation of loss. Thank you so much for reading my poem and sharing your thoughts.

I like it. Why write *Molasses* twice though? Curious... Also, the rhyme in that sentence feels too playful/childish in comparison to the tone of the poem. I also think "The grass grew inches before my eyes" would be better than "has grown". It energizes the poem. 

English isn't my first language, so I'm confused about something. Shouldn't the sentence be "I mistook a roadrunner for a snail"? I mean, is time going fast or slow in this poem? Or is it intentionally both? Thanks! Overall, pretty amazing. Never stop writing.

Thank you so much for the analysis and compliments!!

The slow and more dreadful realization is really fucking beautiful, it's displayed in this poem remarkably. It feels as if these are slow realizations you just simply can not come up with without actually experiencing it. Great work.

I’m really blown away by how much thought you put into your analysis. Thank you so much for taking the time to read and offer your interpretation. The thoughts and feelings you shared are just as valid as mine when I wrote it. There are no wrong answers in poetry, it’s meant to stir the reader into feeling, not guess what I was thinking. Bravo!

>The paint dried hours ago.

I think here you mean that you've been thinking about this for a long time. 


>The grass has grown inches before my eyes. 

Here you keep looking through your windows even if you've been sitting there since days ago. 

>I mistook a snail for a roadrunner. 

This happens because you can't pay attention to details on the street or time passing because you're lost in your thoughts

>Molasses, molasses has filled all the glasses

Here you look inside your house and only see glasses filled with poison, there's an eerie atmosphere. 


>I’d swear she just left. 

>Still smells like her in here. 

You miss her and being in the house where you were together makes you melancholic. 



>What am I going to do with a hairdryer?

You think about sucide. 

This is my interpretations. I may have filled some gaps with my imagination so I think it's pretty inaccurate. Great imagery, very powerful.


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The paint dried hours ago. 

The grass has grown inches before my eyes. 

I mistook a snail for a roadrunner.  

Molasses, molasses has filled all the glasses. 

I’d swear she just left. 

Still smells like her in here. 

What am I going to do with a hairdryer?



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