I really liked the line "We all got into a brawl one night and I accidentally broke Johnny, and threw Jack against the wall.". I really like the rhythm and rhyming in it, it's really good. I also just like this poem in general, it's fun but has a more serious undertone to it at the same time.

haha copy that ✊ I hope all is well and I’m grateful you read it. thank you.

lol. I was an alcoholic for a LONG time. I know all about it! thanks, thats why this poem resonated with me so much.

Thanks :) 

and - the best cure for a hangover is a little more alcohol. trick of the trade, use it wisely.

an excellent poem! very nice metaphor throughout! I don't know if I understand the last line as it reads like you are drinking in the morning... but the rest reads like you want to stop drinking. very nice either way!

I'm sure it was. Lolol... No worries. There's no shame in being the second, third, or 198th up the mountain. ;-)

I’m sure there’s so many out there! haha totally fair. Hopefully mines as good as any other :) was super fun to write.

So, this poem hinges on the personification of bottles of alcohol. It uses wordplay combined with the fact that many alcoholic beverages share their names with the first names of people, to embody those beverages with the traits of human beings. Specifically, this text treats them as friends. In theory, there's nothing wrong with that. It's a solid idea for a poem. 

The trouble is, I'm certain that I've read a version of that elsewhere, at least once. And if I did a Google search for "poems about Jack Daniels" or "poems about Johnny Walker", I'm quite certain I would find some results. 

I'm not convinced this is treading new ground. Sorry, man. You did the thing well. You climbed the mountain. You just weren't the first to get there.

I can appreciate that and I should’ve maybe allowed more to open up here and there.. the rhymes only exist if they’re completely accidental. otherwise I cringe and puke a little, but I heed the feedback for sure. Thank you so much for taking the time to read and reply.

To add to this, I think you could have maybe focused more on the personification part. How are the "people" in this platonic relationship effecting you? What are they telling you? Definitely some serious potential here if done correctly.

The concept is fine (personification of liquor), however I fail to see much of a motive I guess. It just seems you had the concept, without really having something to say. Beyond that, wasn't much rhythm, such as in the rhyming couplets, where the rhyme only seemed to outline the wooden nature of the meter. However, in a guttural way, it is a good piece, and it is apparent it is coming from a place of meaning for you.

I really enjoyed this poem. The rhythm and overall tone is great

hahah I don’t think I would either! =P thank you for reading.

Fun little poem (despite the serious subject matter) with a good bit of wordplay, don’t think you’d get on too well with my friend Jim!!


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My best friends name is Johnny, 

we like to go for long walks. 

&amp;#x200B;

I have another friend - Jack,

but him and Johnny don’t mix well. 

&amp;#x200B;

Jack has a buddy named Daniels, 

they make up my Saturday night, 

and sometimes even entire weeks. 

&amp;#x200B;

Johnny gets tired easily, he’s not the best walking companion.

After Jack joins in, we all kind of sway. 

&amp;#x200B;

Johnny’s easy going with a cigarette,

Jack is easy going either way. 

&amp;#x200B;

We all got into a brawl one night and I accidentally broke Johnny, and threw Jack against the wall.

Johnny stained my carpet and Jack scratched my car. 

I woke up the next day and realized I need to make some new friends,

those two always gave me the worst headaches in the morning. 

Thankfully Daniels is there to save the day. 

&amp;#x200B;

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Platonic Relationships.