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Thank you for your comment. The piece is a reflection of trauma. Like acid, over time the surface it sits in slowly gets eaten away. And destroys that which it touches. And even if you want to change, your roots, your trauma, dispel the growth beyond their nature. The point of the poem is expressed in the final couplet, it is a reckless and relentless endeavor to overcome that beast.

I loved the imagery at the beginning of the poem but the poem falters from then on as the poem becomes more abstract and abstract. Also I'm confused by what you actually want to say in this poem. You have a knack for original imagery. Please try to work upon clarity and consistency in the poem.

I love when descriptive imagery is used to portray emotions and I think that’s what’s going on here,This poems strength lies in its imagery but I feel like you get kinda lost in the imagery and therefore making it not as clear other than that the last two lines serve to tie the entire thing together by switching to first person and I think there should be more of that

*With the falling of the Moon*

*The trees have gone ill*

*The rising of the Sun*

*Lighting such imperfections*

*The roots however stay in place*

*Minding their power to dispel*

*Growth beyond their nature*

*There’s blood in the soil*

*From a burning heart*

*Never to find solace*

*Nor peace in company*

*For they will never know*

*The nature of the Beast*

*Gluttonous in his endeavor*

*To eat away all that serves*

*To accomplish these goals*

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*Reckless, I’ve become*

*Relentlessly searching*

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Comment 1

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Comment 2

Aegrimonia