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u/SeventhDeer thankyou for your wise words. If truth be known this is about an old clock that looked good but made far too much noise (im a night owl). It wound me up and i thought it fitted but really do appreciate your feedback. Take care

I Gotta say, the ending *tick* great and is overall a great ending, but I just feel that the "I wish i had never wound you up, because you wind me up." is a bit cheesy and goes against the tone of the poem

You my friend are a wonderful human being for passing on great advice. Take care!

There is something so degrading about the consistency of seconds passing.  I really enjoyed this! You can hear the authors exhaustion between each line. The only thing I could say would be that in the third line, the use of the word ‘something’ in lieu of ‘someone’ threw me for a loop, and to be nitpicky you used the wrong “your” (should be you’re). Thank you for the wonderful read!

I wish i had never wound you up, because you wind me up.

Tick tock, Tick tock.

Something that looks so good shouldn't make me feel bad.

Tick tock, Tick tock.

&amp;#x200B;

Your the countdown to my existance....

Tick tock, Tick tock.

You need my input to keep you running, more than I need you.

Tick tock, Tick tock.

&amp;#x200B;

I hear you even when im asleep..

Tick tok, Tick tock.

A part of me enjoys the consistancy of the beat.

Tick tock, Tick tock.

&amp;#x200B;

I dont like the look of your face.

Tick tock, Tick tock.

You never kept good time, perhaps too old.

Tick tock, Tick tock.

&amp;#x200B;

I have decided to let you run out.

Tick tock, Tick tock.

I dont need you anymore.

Tick.

&amp;#x200B;

[https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/t9x4ye/i\_am\_i\_see\_i\_hear\_i\_feel\_i\_hope\_i\_wish\_i\_knew/](https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/t9x4ye/i_am_i_see_i_hear_i_feel_i_hope_i_wish_i_knew/)

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The Old Ticking Clock