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Home - J. Nimbus

The door awaits silent unchanged

The spider still keeps vigil over the door

He knows nobody resides within

He unfastens the bolt for a moment

Then locks the world away

Everything as it was forgotten

Only marked by the dust of time

He remembers the joy that filled this place

Turn toward the stair

Push back the memory

The purpose of this place is dead

Chamber door in hand

Echoes of dreams

Now cold and forgotten

The man lies upon a bed too large

Embracing the cold

Wishing quiet the revenant of home

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Posted Oct 23, 2022, 7:36 AM UTC

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IamNobodyWhoAreYew•

J. Nimbus -- is an awesome pseudonym

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LarperPro•

When I read he in the third line I thought it it was referring to the spider. It took me a second read to realize the poem is about a man who is abandoning an old house full of memories.

I really liked the poem because the verses bring forth images. The only thing that confused me was the last line. Is the man wishing peace to the ghost of the house? The phrasing is a bit weird but keep in mind I'm not a native English speaker.

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Adept_Channel_668OP•

Nah it makes sense to try to find a deeper meaning. The truth is the poem is about coming home to an empty house that was where he was trying to start a family. With nobody there the man doesn't think of the house as a home. Now it is like the risen corpse of home.

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LarperPro•

Oh I see. The verse "then locks the world away" made me think he is going from the house, instead of arriving at.

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Adept_Channel_668OP•

Oh I can see that. Nah it was implying he was locking the door behind him as he went inside. The house has two stories and his room is upstairs but I like how when read from the other side it can appear that there are stairs leading to the door. Cool

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Adept_Channel_668OP•

Full disclosure the poem was just about me coming home from the work week. Then I got laid and magically my depression got significantly better.

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Adept_Channel_668OP•

I wrote another poem the morning after but can't work up the effort to post it.

Hero - J Nimbus

What if the hero of the story

Is not the real way to find glory

But a cunningly allegory

A villians easy inventory

So those who rose then to oppose them

Would fall swiftly in a war we

Cannot win

What if the hero we were sold

Were just what the evil men of old

Knew that if everyone was told

Would let the devious behold

The ones that they couldn't bend

So they could swiftly bring and end

To the foolish souls who in

Their struggles to fight what's within

wrong or right and even sin

Would make them easy prey

As the inner war that they

Struggle fight resist and say

That that truly meant that they

Would never live

What if the only way to win

Is just to let the devils in

And we who think we're doing right

Are surrendering the fight

By being bold within the sight

Of they who learned that only might

Can thrive

What if our stuggle to survive

Is the way the good men strive

To leave the outlaws still alive

Here at the end

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