Silence fought back
by a tapping of fingers.
Shifting feet search
for stability gone.
Eyes turn to hide what
should never have lingered.
Sweat from a brow
begs for breaking of dawn.
Self-holding hands
try soothe with embrace before
arms cross defensively
over the heart.
Unrested doubts are
made known on the face
of a gaze in the mirror
that quickly departs.
Posted Nov 4, 2022, 7:02 PM UTC · edited
I really enjoyed how the theme of the title of this poem is threaded through the poem itself! i would work on the third stanza; “Eyes turn to hide what should never have lingered.” The theme is conveyed through this line, but the delivery is slightly unclear and had me rereading the stanza multiple times to understand it. I really enjoyed this poem!
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I love the imagery, I've never been very good at critique, take my appreciation instead :) thanks for a good read.
Thanks!